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Cambridge IELTS 10 Test 4 Writing Task 2: Sample Answer
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Cambridge IELTS 10 Test 4 · Writing Task 2
Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
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- Introduction: advantages outweigh disadvantages if fair
- Advantage 1: stable funding for collections and displays
- Advantage 2: more attentive visitors and sense of value
- Disadvantage: exclusion of low-income visitors, and the solution of concessions, with conclusion
Band 7.5 sample answer (288 words)
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Museums are costly to run, and whether visitors should pay at the door is a long-running debate. In my opinion, the benefits of charging admission do outweigh the drawbacks, provided that the system is designed with fairness in mind.
The principal advantage is financial stability. Preserving collections, employing conservators and staging exhibitions require substantial funds, and relying solely on government grants leaves institutions vulnerable whenever budgets are cut. Ticket revenue gives a museum a dependable income, which can be spent on better displays, longer opening hours or the restoration of fragile artefacts. A visitor who pays a modest fee is, in effect, contributing directly to the quality of what they see.
Charging can also change how people behave. Those who have paid are often more attentive and more likely to stay longer, whereas free entry can attract people who simply wander in to shelter from the rain. Furthermore, a ticket price signals that the collection has genuine value, which may encourage respect for the exhibits.
The main disadvantage is that fees may exclude those on low incomes, such as students, pensioners and large families. Since museums are meant to educate the public, turning people away because of cost seems contrary to their purpose. In addition, visitor numbers often fall sharply after charges are introduced, which reduces the cultural impact of the institution. However, this problem can be largely solved without abandoning fees. Many museums offer free entry for children, discounted tickets for students, or a free day each month, which protects access while still raising revenue.
In conclusion, the financial security and improved upkeep that admission fees provide outweigh the risk of excluding some visitors, particularly when concessions are available for those who cannot afford the full price.
Why this answer scores Band 7.5
- Task Response: Answers the exact question by stating that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, then weighs both sides and offers a practical solution. Each point is developed with reasons rather than simply listed.
- Coherence and Cohesion: Clear paragraphing with a logical movement from advantages to the disadvantage and its remedy. Linking expressions such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition' and 'However' are varied and accurate.
- Lexical Resource: Precise topic vocabulary including 'dependable income', 'fragile artefacts', 'government grants' and 'discounted tickets'. British spelling is used consistently.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Uses a wide range of structures such as 'whereas' clauses, participles, passives and a conditional-style 'provided that', with very few errors. Punctuation supports clarity.
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