Society · Opinion essay · Band 7
Are Traditional Customs Losing Relevance?
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Opinion essay
Some people believe that traditional customs and ceremonies are losing their relevance in modern society and should be allowed to fade away naturally. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Model answer (band 7)
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I disagree with the view that traditional customs should simply be left to disappear, even though I accept that some will inevitably change or decline as societies modernise.
Traditional customs serve a social function that modern substitutes rarely replicate fully. Ceremonies marking milestones such as weddings, harvests, or coming-of-age give communities a shared rhythm and a sense of continuity across generations, connecting people to ancestors and to each other through a common set of practices. In an era when many people feel increasingly isolated, partly due to digital life replacing in-person community, these collective rituals provide one of the few remaining occasions when entire communities gather with a shared purpose, something that is genuinely difficult to recreate from scratch once lost.
That said, I accept that customs cannot and should not be frozen in time. Traditions that depend on practices modern society now considers harmful or unjust, for instance those that reinforce rigid gender roles, deserve genuine scrutiny and, where necessary, reform or retirement. Allowing customs to evolve, rather than preserving every detail unchanged, is itself part of a tradition remaining meaningfully alive rather than becoming a museum piece performed without belief.
The real danger lies not in gradual, organic evolution but in complete abandonment, where younger generations lose any connection to a shared cultural history. Once a tradition disappears entirely, it is strikingly difficult to revive authentically, and much is lost in the attempt, as many countries attempting cultural revival projects have discovered.
In conclusion, rather than letting traditions fade away passively, societies should actively adapt them to remain relevant, preserving their social value while discarding only the elements that are genuinely harmful.
Why this answer scores band 7
Mapped to the 4 official IELTS Writing criteria.
- Task Response: disagrees clearly but engages thoughtfully with the counter-argument (customs that should change), avoiding an oversimplified defence of tradition.
- Coherence and Cohesion: logical movement from the value of customs, to a concession, to a distinction between evolution and abandonment, tied together clearly.
- Lexical Resource: natural, precise vocabulary ('coming-of-age', 'cultural revival', 'museum piece') used accurately and with some idiomatic flair.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy: a strong variety of complex structures, including non-defining relative clauses, used with consistent accuracy.
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